His mouth pledges lies,
lies that go down smooth as bourbon
followed by a burning sensation
that makes my eyes tear, my body tremble
{mama said be careful of men with
lips like clouds: pulling you into your own needs- fast}
it's the burning that's addictive
my nerve ribbons exposed, heart all naked,
feelin' weird for liking it, this, him.
in his arms I become that poet-
" always dying and surviving "
I become a rail thin virgin hurtin' for a touch.
Then I remember he's lying, jus' pretendin' ...
until he's not.
S.
Your emotion and passion are simply ethereal. I'm taken away.
ReplyDeleteI feel this...I like his mouth pledges lies that go down smooth as bourbon...I think I have met him :) Great emotional piece...
ReplyDeleteHow sultry and moving, this poem. Psychologically well-studied, yet emotionally expansive. Marvelous.
ReplyDeleteThis is the most tender, sensual poem I've read in a long time. I could feel the atmosphere surrounding these words, the intense, addictive rush of the feelings one can have towards a man who is bad for you.
ReplyDeleteExquisite. x
Ben, my steadfast Ben. TY.
ReplyDeleteSusie, hey, yep you probably have met this man,
ReplyDeleteand will again. Ty.
miss Muffit, double wow. Ty. your response
ReplyDeleteis thrilling.
Lydia, the pyschology of a poem is what really interests me. TY
ReplyDeleteWow that poem is very powerful. It's very relate-able.
ReplyDelete-Farrah
Farrah's Muse
its fantastic, miss muffit said all i wanted to say, but so much better
ReplyDeleteOh Yes the lies that melt your heart right into their arms of love. Hmmm... I love the write swept me right away into those lieing arms.
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Farrah - hey Ty. haven't we all had that
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Lovely louLou - TY.
ReplyDeletebeth, hi. yep. so good & so bad at once.
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thx 4 the comment. Well, I like this. Keep on writing! :-)
ReplyDeleteyeah the clothes are freaken awesome
ReplyDeletethe narration really pulled me in - sultry.
ReplyDeletehey julien, ty.
ReplyDeleteIsquis - yep. I think.
ReplyDeletehello, sweet Paige - TY. I like this girl,
ReplyDeletethe narrator.
I like comparing a kiss, partner, experience, to hard liquor. That's a really great metaphor, very effectively loaded.
ReplyDeletehey there, Camilla - TY
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