Hey You, with your mouth dancing
along my spine,
commanding flashes of light behind my eyes,
there is a fierce faith that comes alive
when your hands take control
and this entices my wild streak, but the
righteousness in me needs to turn over
the coffee table, and make you, dear sinner repent
and savor each thick piece of justice I see
fit to love upon you.
I'll take a chance that you,
my confused orphan, nesting in the
body of a grown man
will learn me.
Me
powerful piece.
ReplyDeleteWow! An unexpected dynamic in sensuality.
ReplyDeleteTy, Sheilagh.
ReplyDeleteHey, Susie, Ty.
ReplyDeleteJust got shivers. I don't know why, but this is no ordinary erotic writing. There's something dark in it.
ReplyDeleteThe opening words demand attention..speak loudly and clearly..but also warmth..an openness and invitation to unify...jae
ReplyDeleteWell he is in for a lesson then!
ReplyDeleteHey, Olivia, shiver-on.
ReplyDeleteOh yeah, there is an invitation in this, jae.
ReplyDeleteYou are so right, Egg.
ReplyDeleteI've been back a few times now, but I still can't find the words to express my reaction to this piece.
ReplyDeleteI mean that in the best possible way. ;)
Think harder, Bard, 'cause I wouldn't want your song to be unsung.
ReplyDeletehello Shauna,
ReplyDeletealways there is a chance!
kisses^^
Hey, Rebecca, no doubt - hope. Ty.
ReplyDeletethe confused orphan in the body of a grown up man..me wonders about the background and i agree with olivia..i also felt something kinda dark in it
ReplyDeleteThe equivalent of brutal honesty? Brutal love. You are hoping to be learned, and yet there is a sense of demand. Hell, I don't know, but interesting and very well written!
ReplyDeleteThe beginning is worth the admission price alone. Th rest is a spectacle to behold. Many thanks. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteGrdetings from London.
There's is something much deeper in most erotica, Ty, Claudia.
ReplyDeleteThe narrator of the poem W.W., is hoping to be learned, uh huh.
Hey, Cuban.
intense. a bit scary and yet quite a enticing piece.
ReplyDeleteReally? Everyone seems to think this is so intense, and it's
ReplyDeleteso off the cuff. TY, RMP.